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The government should pay for the course fees for everyone who wants to study at the university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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In many states, people used to eat a wider variety of
food
 than the local
environment
 could suggest. As a consequence of
this
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 a massive amount of
food
 people eat today is imported from different countries. There are several significant advantages and disadvantages of
this
 foreign
food
 consumption. On the one hand, the main advantage of overseas
food
 consumption is that people can eat whatever they want all over the world. It is one of the greatest achievements of our modern society, so why not use
this
 gift of civilization and enjoy the taste of exotic
food
.
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Moreover
,
this
 technology is very convenient, because in some cases it is much cheaper to import some foreign
food
,
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 than grow it in a local
environment
.
For instance
, it will cost more money to grow bananas in Lithuania, than import them, because the climate is not accurate for
this
 type of fruit.
On the other hand
, exporting
food
 from another part of the world is causing
a
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huge harm to the
environment
 due to the carbon footprint, which is left in our
environment
 during transportation.
For example
, it is much better of our nature to avoid
food
travels
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on
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a long
distance
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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