Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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world,
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plethora of
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believe
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of
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the
politicians
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politician's
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personel
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personal
life
in
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media
platform
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. My standpoint is to protect each
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person's
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private lifestyle.
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and foremost, there are significant benefits
being
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a Politician. Someday they become a famous
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personality
among
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their society. Where they always
comes
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and go with a big protocol.
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they have a strong personal
relation
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with every kind of
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in their field.
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, majority of the
politicians
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children's
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spend their lives like a royal family. The most
conspicious
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conspicuous
reason why
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believe
with
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this
view is that
politicians
also
are humans with respect and dignity
however
some people
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media
spokesperson
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spokespersons
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do not respect
this
bridge between
as
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a politician and
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indiviual
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individual
itself.
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a public servant is not
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dreams
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.
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they
also
share some private life with their kids not as a politician but as a father,
this
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we witnessed that some
paprazzi's
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paparazzi's
paparazzi
always intrigued
in
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their family life. To illustrate some
politicians
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allegations from their fake reporting by
which
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there
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family is not very strong and failed to cope
these
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filthy scandals.
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could result in a decline in each
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basic ability. To conclude, the
afformentioned
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aforementioned
issues should be addressed properly as each humankind should secure their personal matters aside. I believe that the government should research these various problems if they want to lead a respectable future for
upcoming
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the upcoming
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generation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intrusion
  • accountability
  • transparency
  • sensationalism
  • privacy
  • public interest
  • collateral damage
  • precedent
  • responsible journalism
  • exploitation
  • democratic processes
  • media culture
  • balance
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