What is homelessness? And what you think about the reasons of for people having home less

Homelessness is a situation in which
one
is not capable of having any home shelter to live in, neither owned nor rented
due to
poor economic conditions. There can be many reasons that some people
are having
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have
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homes and can mainly be categorised into two categories which are self-made conditions and another is external factors, which I will
be explaining
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explain
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in my below paragraphs. Beginning with the former
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apply
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one
, the first example in
this
category could be drug addiction, which may create
such
situations that
leads
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lead
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to home less of a prestigious social being. Another is ignoring
inflation
, which means that some people are not considering
inflation
&
not
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and not
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forecasting the future situations that could
be resulted
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result
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from
this
inflation
. For ,example a person can be living a satisfactory lifestyle in the present day and not making any effort to increase his revenue or salary,
then
he may face difficulties in future because
inflation
is rising and we cannot predict when a situation may come in which
inflation
may rise instantly,
then
such
person can lead to even homeless conditions. Moving the latter
one
which is External factors, which may include natural calamities and war between countries, resultant of which can be the destruction of properties, which could become a reason for
homeless
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homelessness
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. For ,Example fire in
one
's factory may result in a huge loss, that could not be recoverable. It can be concluded that
one
can control some factors that may lead to homeless, but there can be some situation, which is not controllable in
one
's hand.
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task response
The essay adequately addresses the topic by discussing the reasons for homelessness, but it lacks depth and specific examples. The response is somewhat complete but lacks thorough development of ideas.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is generally clear. However, the introduction and conclusion could be more substantial to provide a better sense of closure and introduction to the topic.

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