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You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers. In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take

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Dear Mr Yan, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about I will not be able to continue my beauty
course
 at
academy
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. I am
student
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a student
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 that taking
beauty
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a beauty
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course
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courses
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 in evening classes, and for your
information
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i
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I
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 currently working at Banta as
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a full
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full time
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 worker.
However
, my working shift
have
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 to change from morning to evening shift. As a
consequences
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of
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that
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i
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I
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 will not be able to continue my evening
course
. Due to, my
course
 is remaining 6 month and I already paid full payment for the
course
, I request to refund my fees for the 6 month remaining as a the
aggrement
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agreement
 that we
aggred
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agreed
agree
 the refund can
be request
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 if the
course
 is not over than 6 months. I would like
if
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it if
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 you can deposit it
to
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into
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 my bank account with the details that I provide to you while joining the
course
. I will
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be greatful
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greatful
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grateful
 if you could consider my request and refund
as
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me as
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 soon as
posibble
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possible
. Thank you in advance and look
foward
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forward
 to hearing from you soon.
Your
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 sincerely, Lynda
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