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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travek to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping.

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It has been observed due to digitalisation and startup reasons many small
shops
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 have been closing.Now
Customers
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 have many options to buy their brand either online or in big shopping malls. I believe
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 is the correct indication of development.I am going to explain my thoughts in both expect.
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, The Local store has few benefits as
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 don'
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 need to drive far to purchase any
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.
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,it will avoid driving, and traffic rush and help with pollution control, which is beneficial for the environment and society.The Local store gives some employment for those who can'
t
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 go far for the job due to many reasons. Whereas the local shop doesn'
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 keep all the required items
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 consumer need to visit large shopping centres eventually.The Local small stores can'
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 give any offers because they are not getting big margins due to transportation. On the other ,hand Large shopping centres provide
customers
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 with all
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 shopping under a single building. They will provide the client with a good offer
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 because they are ordering big stock and getting the same
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 at big margins.The client gets the option to choose their
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 for their own budget and use.Children's entertainment games are
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 had in shopping complexes nowadays.So after busy ,life you can leisure your time.Even
customers
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 can get multiple manufacturers for a single
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 in the shopping complex and it allows
customers
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 to choose as per their budget and use. The Markets are now diversified in
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 5G era, people are
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 started to do their shopping online. They are getting many offers on online platforms due to that competition has increased significantly. In the current ,situation only big shopping centres are competing not the local small
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. Having all
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 consideration, local
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 are closing rapidly because of their various factors like discounts, categories of products in spite of visiting local
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, and people's convenience to go shopping malls.
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, I assert it is a positive trend for the development of our society.
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