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Many people have realised that our whole world, is globalised now but not everyone supports that it is favourable for us. Globalisation have now affected each & every part of the world but it has its then fors and againsts.

#people #world #favourable #globalisation #part #fors #againsts
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 in technology has become effortless for us to reach any part of the world which is both
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 & effect of Globalisation, Globalisation is the process which
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 up the exchanges of series, technologies, human capital, goods or even cultures and traditions all over the planet.
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 it has promoted interactions among different promoted indigenous people are over the globe. In the modern world, it has been the major promoter behind the spread of innovation.
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 the globalised market, consumers now have varied and cheap choices for products.
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, people now have the access to enjoy foreign culture & luxuries Along with all
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has posed dangers to small and local businesses. Because of increased
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 unequal economic growth is seen
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 while the developing ones face more difficulties. Apart othe from
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advantage to exploit cheap labour by hiring from developing or
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 countries. Overall it can be said that like every coin has two sides so
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globalisation Developed businesses have taken
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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