Each year, the crime rate increase. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity.
It is believed that the rate of delinquency has escalated and each year there is an increase in
this
issue. I totally agree with the above statement. This
essay will discuss some of the reasons for this
increased rate of crimes along with
some solutions and in the end, will give a valid conclusion.
To being
with, in Verb problem
begin
this
present era, everyone especially, parents
are very busy with their hectic routines due to
which they do not get enough time to have a check and balance vision on their children. Therefore
, unfortunately, youngsters at home are invariably spending hours in front of a screen watching movies and learning many bad things such
as using rifles, doing
murders and kidnapping people. Verb problem
committing
For example
, the majority of parents
who cannot give time to their children suffer from depression owing to their children's bad behaviour. Furthermore
, the majority of criminals do not get their desired punishment, as a result
, new criminals get an open chance of doing anything because they do not have fear
of penalization. Correct article usage
a fear
For instance
, in China, no matter who had committed a crime gets
their punishment.
In spite of these causes, there are some remedies to all the problems. Correct subject-verb agreement
get
Firstly
, the government should pay heed to everyone in the public and should deliver programs showing punishments according to
lawlessness and their fate. To illustrate this
, many individuals are usually unaware of the result of doing crimes so through these programs they can have awareness about everything. Secondly
, parents
and even elder members of families should take care of their young fellows at home.
To sum up
, although
the rate of crimes is increasing substantially nowadays. Nevertheless
, in my opinion, if government
and Correct article usage
the government
parents
will actively take part in solving this
issue, no one can fight to do any bad act.Submitted by drsanaghani on
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