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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
It is often believed that in recent times we get so many options in our life. I am firmly in favour of
this
 statement as having so many choices may provide us with several opportunities in various walks of life. One of the primary reasons that we have a wide range of choices is that it may enable us to carry out our
further
 education anywhere we desire.
In other words
, our old generations were not able to study abroad about a decade ago, which made them remain narrow-minded as well as
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 their horizons. But now, we, as young people, can stand lots of chances of applying
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 popular universities or colleges in other countries. We can
therefore
 not only expand our social circles and outlooks but
also
 exchange cultural traditions and rituals, which is highly likely beneficial to us and
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society.
Moreover
, we are
also
 able
choose
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 what kind of electrical gadgets or appliances to purchase freely.
This
 means that the youth can order any devices they want with just a click on
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 button on the Internet and more notably, comparing various kinds
models
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 together with their prices is
also
 available for them.
For example
, my little brother has
such
 a lot of options that he might browse different online stores in search of catchy accessories, examining
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 qualities as well as differences
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 theirs, which in turn help them distinguish what is fake and original. In conclusion, since there is the presence of numerous choices in life, we are bound to benefit from the favourable combination of circumstances they grant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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