Some people think that students benefit from going to private secondary schools. Others, however, feel that private secondary schools can have a negative effect on society as a whole. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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essay will discuss more points of view and the ideas of private secondary schools.

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quite expensive for

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actually is a good investment in your child's future. They usually provide a good learning scheme for their student, the pupils will be guided in more intensive ways to learn and adapt the knowledge compared to government secondary schools.

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all parents will afford to send their

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burden to pay for their

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's education.

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's focus on learning due to the large of students in a classroom, teachers will not able to control the students all

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Some people think that students benefit from going to private secondary schools. Others, however, feel that private secondary schools can have a negative effect on society as a whole. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, rich countries are becoming rich and poor are becoming poorer. What are the causes of this problem? How can this problem be tackle? educat, governm, spent earn

Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live luxurious lives, in contrast, academicians and scientists earn far less. Do you agree that academicians and scientist ought to be paid more?

The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some think schools should rewards students who have the best academic results, while others think it’s more important to reward students who achieve other types of success (such as sports, music, and good behavior). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.