In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disgaree with this opinion ?

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essay will discuss the increasing numbers of people who have health problems from ingesting too much fast

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and whether should

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start to apply higher taxes on

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food

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. I strongly agree with imposing a higher tax rate on fast

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and the provider. On the one hand,the reason

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fast

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seems to fit in people’s life perfectly in current society, is since everyone is busy with work and

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with peers, healthy

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choices do not

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for the general public to pay attention to. Especially when these fast

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chain stores provide

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attractive deals

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as

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a dollar ice cream or two dollars burgers, these are marketing strategies to lour people to purchase from them.

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governments

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have implemented

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health-related information to the public to enjoy healthy

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of fast

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, it has clearly shown that it is not enough to put a halt to the current health issue, by agreeing to impose a new tax rate on these

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chains,

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can be able to track the ups and downs of the

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trend and decide on how much tax to apply.

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, it can consider

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for these companies to contribute to the general people from what

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earn in business. In my opinion, I strongly believe that

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much take action and

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to reduce

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phenomenon, as businesses will only grow bigger when

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customers

are keen to pay for

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products. By restricting the company from selling fast

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such

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low

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prices

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, the general public will eventually turn their option to alternatives

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fruits and vegetables.