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With recent improvements online, it is increasingly possible for people to leave reviews for goods and services they have purchased. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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As a part of the recent improvement of e-commerce websites, it now allows consumers to share their experience on either services or products publically. In
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 I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of allowing consumers to share their
review
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 openly.
Firstly
, one of the main advantages of having online
reviews
 is that it can help the company to promote
their
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 products and services.
However
,
people
 may have different concerns and
from
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reading
other’s
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reviews
 it can provide them validation
on
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 making the purchase.
For example
,
people
 often share photos of the goods that they have purchased. Having photos of the actual product assures others on the product
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 the description and
this
 is
also
 a great advertisement for the business.
On the other hand
,
people
 have different standards and values that they look for in making a purchase. Having online
reviews
 can set the wrong expectations for some
people
, because they may not have the same values.
For example
, the
review
 for a restaurant called “Happy Days”
had
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mentioned that it offers a generous portion
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their
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 fried rice.
However
, the judgement of portion size varies based on an individual's
appetites
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.
In addition
, it is hard to believe whether the
review
 is real or not and some
reviews
 may involve inappropriate
contents
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. To sum up,
online
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review
 is a great way to help promote a business and provide validation and assurance to customers for future purchases.
Moreover
, reading online
reviews
 could lead to a misconception of the goods or services due to an individual’s standards.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transparency
  • Trustworthiness
  • Informed consumers
  • Immediate feedback
  • Competitive environment
  • False reviews
  • Objective
  • Comprehensive experience
  • Short-term satisfaction
  • Long-term quality
  • Innovation
  • Garner
  • Representation
  • Fosters
  • Enhances
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