Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
It is clearly seen that technology has been affordable and available to
human
in the current era, which allows mature people to take remote Fix the agreement mistake
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working
and enables pupils to study without the need to leave their Replace the word
work
home
. Debatable as it is, I hold the point of view that Fix the agreement mistake
homes
this
advancement of technology would have positive
impact on professional and educational prospects despite some drawbacks.
On the one hand, employees are now able to attend meetings through online platforms thanks to the invention of many state-of-the-art technologies. Organizing online meetings give attendees more time to prepare for more detailed presentations and clearer ideas when speaking. Add an article
a positive
For example
, instead
of bringing along any paper documents before meetings, they save all their documents and files in
their computers so that they can share the computer screen Change preposition
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for
others when making a presentation. Change preposition
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In addition
, pupils can stay away from long distances to schools. It means that they can learn anything they want at their own place instead
of having to travel so far in a long time, which wastes so much time. For instance
, learners now can enroll
in any online Change the spelling
enrol
courses
in any Fix the agreement mistake
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fields
, even an abroad university. After taking online tests and completing the course, they can get an online university certificate which is equal in quality Fix the agreement mistake
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with
the physical one without any need to study abroad.
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On the other hand
, technologies
can bring some harmful negativity regarding professional and educational aspects. Fix the agreement mistake
technology
Firstly
, employers can definitely find it hard to control and supervise the quality of tasks assigned to their employees. For example
, employers totally cannot communicate with their workers face-to-face, which can lead to difficulty when discussing some particular problems employees encounter. Secondly
, up-to-date technological inventions can hold potential harm to children
. Without any need to travel, children
can have the possibility to immerse into a sedentary lifestyle, which results in their mental and physical developments
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being badly
effected
. Correct your spelling
affected
For instance
, studying at home for a whole day long makes pupils sluggish and don't want to join in outdoor activities to feel more energetic and train their physical health.
To conclude, although
holding some disadvantages such
as difficult communication between colleagues and the possibility to have negative
effect on Add an article
a negative
children
development, I deeply believe that advanced technologies nowadays have more good than harm, Change noun form
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such
as helping people to work more effectively and enable
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enabling
children
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