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Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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To put a full stop on the illegal activities strict rules should be made by authorities. It is suggested by some individuals that death penalties should be given to the lawbreaker to reduce unlawful acts. The forthcoming writing will shed some points justifying the above-discussed scenario.
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, it is important to set examples in front of others, what are the consequences of the unlawful activities. Needless to say, it is human nature, if one knows the outcomes of certain actions can jeopardize their life,
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 they will always be mindful of their actions.
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, in Muslim countries, the death penalty is given to those who commit crimes like rape and murder. It is on record that
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 crimes are only in a single number.
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, it is important to make the harsh law for serious crimes like rape and murder.
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, it is important to
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 instant decisions on serious unlawful activities to reduce their number. It goes without saying that
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 delayed is
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 denied, so authorities should give punishment to the culprits as soon as possible,
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 of giving time for the offender to run away.
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, in some remote places
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 is given by the panchayat system and decisions in given on the spot
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 which offenders do not get time to run and the victim gets
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. Considering all the points above, It is seen that if harsh punishments are given in less time,
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 helps in reducing the crime rate.
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task achievement
Consider including a more explicit introduction that clearly states your stance on the topic. This will help to better frame your discussion and make your argument more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the conclusion by summarizing the main points discussed and restating your stance. This will help to reinforce your argument to the reader.
task achievement
You've provided relevant examples, such as the use of capital punishment in Muslim countries, which help to illustrate your points effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a logical structure, with each paragraph discussing a distinct point supporting the overall argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent effect
  • retribution
  • irreversibility
  • judicial error
  • human rights
  • ethical considerations
  • life imprisonment
  • perception of violence
  • rehabilitation
  • reforming
  • contentious
  • societal perception
  • morality
  • recidivism
  • capital punishment
  • justice system
  • incarceration
  • penology
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