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Genetic engineering is a dangerous trend. It should be limited. To what extent do you agree?

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In the modern era, there are a lot of developments going on all over the world in which genetic engineering
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 under. Some people think that the
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 type of development mentioned above is extremely harmful and should be limited to a certain level. I completely agree with the above-mentioned notion , so in the forthcoming, paragraphs I will support my standpoint. First and foremost, genetic changes can be harmful to a human being on which tests are being conducted.
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, any new development needs a person for trial
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 as the exchange of numerous genes, and it can be harmful to an individual on whom tests are being done.
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, genetic engineering can make a person go into a coma and even it can lead to the death of a particular individual on which new substances are being used.
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, new
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 can be harmful to some people.
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, genetic
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 needs a hefty amount of
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 to be invested in numerous
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.
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, there is no guarantee of a positive result in a particular project, and there is a huge amount of
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 spent just on a single work.
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, spending a lot of amount on one thing is foolishness,
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money
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 can be utilized on other crucial
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 as reducing unemployment and poverty as well.
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,
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money
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 spent on genetic engineering can be used in other areas.
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, genetic engineering can
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result in harmful effects on human beings because its outcome cannot be calculated.
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, its
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 can create a monster because of the dangerous chemicals which are being used by scientists.
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, a monster produced unpredictably cannot be controlled by anyone and it can
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 damage human lives. It can even damage numerous
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 as natural resources, and buildings and can kill people.
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, genetic
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 trends can be dangerous for all humankind.
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, genetic engineering is an extremely harmful trend and ,
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 it should be limited to only a few individuals because it can cause various
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 to human beings which are discussed in the above segments.
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