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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsary part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I totally agree with the statement that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes like assisting senior citizens in
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underprivileged
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underprivileged
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 are completely immersed in online games ,
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 they will
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 programme without fail
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