Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsary part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I totally agree with the statement that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes like assisting senior citizens in
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shelters and cleaning the neighbourhood or planting trees ,teaching sports to
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underprivileged
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underprivileged
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but not just sports but
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things ,it would enhance
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in learning ethics and human values
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are completely immersed in online games ,
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etc .they are not even supporting their parents in
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house
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community service doesn't include grades
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won't show interest in
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activity . so the school authorities should add marks
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final result .
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they will
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programme without fail
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