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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. why is this? Do you think it is positive or negative development?

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Advertising is an important part of businesses. It helps to increase the sales of the
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 to raise awareness regarding the
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, businesses give a lot of thought and spend a fortune
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 their advertisements. In recent days, many
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 that are being advertised, usually highlight
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their new
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 or improvements. for
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example, advertisements on skin care
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the
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 in scent,
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, packaging or addition of a new ingredient. the possible reason for
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emphasize
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 on a new change could be that people expect the
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 to be more appealing or expect it to work better than
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an earlier
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product
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products
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. And most
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people like to go for a new experience as it could be more exciting than the older one.
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, research may have shown that emphasizing a new change increases the sales of a certain
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. Advertising is a competitive field. Each business tries to improve
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 advertising to have a better
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sales
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 than
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 competitors.
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, I think that
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 a consumer's point of view, it is a positive development to advertise the
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 with new
changes
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. Because, by trying to make
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, the producers always experiment to make their
products
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 better. They will try to improve the quality, the presentation and the ingredients in the
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. Due to
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 reason, the experience the consumer will receive will be enhanced. There can be
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impact
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 strategy too. People who are happy and comfortable with the current
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 might refuse to buy the newer one. And by frequent
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, a
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 may actually lose its uniqueness when compared with the others. When considering all, it is
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my opinion that advertising a
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 as a newer version has more benefits to the business and to the consumer both.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innovation
  • Fast-paced
  • Distinguishing
  • Psychological aspect
  • Inherently
  • Perceived
  • Continuous improvement
  • Revolutionary
  • Feasible
  • Throwaway culture
  • Undervalue
  • Longevity
  • Obscure
  • Novelty
  • Unsatisfactory
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