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Band 1

Some people think that companies should provide employees with exercise time during the day. What is your opinion about this?

#people #companies #employees #exercise #time
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Imagine a worker
what
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 can do a complicated job 24 hours a day without sleep, food or breaks.
Such
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 workers do not exist, but /
robot
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robots
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 could easily do these jobs.
Robots
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 first began as mechanical toys
at
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in
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 the 18th century and were
building
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built
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 to amuse wealthy people. Very simple systems for controlling machines
are
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 invented
about
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at about
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 the same time. Real
robots
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 that could be programmed
perform
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to perform
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 difficult tasks were not practical until computers became available to control them in the 1960s. Since
,
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 they have become part
from
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of
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 our everyday lives. Most
robots
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 work in factories, assembling cars and electronic equipment.
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 a few
robots
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does
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do
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 dangerous
jobssuch
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jobs such
 as exploring space, domestic
robots
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 can dean our floors and
cutting
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the grass, and medical
robots
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 can even
operations
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 in hospitals. The latest
robots
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 even look a little bit human
can
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and can
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 copy human movements
such
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 as walking up stairs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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