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To what extend is the nuclear technology a danger to life on Earth? What are the benefits and risks associated with its use?

#technology #danger #life #earth #risks
In
this
 concurrent world, it's undoubtedly true that many people are afraid to use nuclear technology because problems are associated to use it.
However
, nuclear technology is the backbone of many nations. From my perspective, nuclear
power
 poses the greatest threat to living creatures.In my opinion, I will elaborate on the beneficial and adverse aspects of
this
 thread and
thus
 lead to a logical conclusion. There is adequate evidence to obtainable substantiate reasons. The top-notch concrete reason is nuclear
power
 plant is the primary source of energy for many industrializations and developing country due to low-cost maintenance.
Nevertheless
, any leakage that happened by mistake in
nuclear
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a nuclear
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power
station
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stations
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,
it
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causes great disasters near the surrounding area.
For instance
,
Russian
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the Russian
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 country is known for building nuclear
power
 weapons. In recent times, many people are died due to unknown causes near
the
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nuclear
power
 plant, and
still
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 investigation has been going to find the root causes of
this
 disaster.Many scientific experts believe that mysterious disasters are happened due to radioactive
emission
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emissions
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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