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It is very expensive to restore old buildings, and it would be better to spend this money on new houses. To what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#buildings #money #houses
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The refurbishment of decrepit
buildings
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 requires a large amount of investment, and there are those who claim that it would be more efficient to create new
buildings
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. Because of growing demand and modernization, I consider it to be a wise decision, which I would discuss in the
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 paragraphs. Overpopulation causes numerous issues, and one of them is lack of accommodation which leads to increasing average prices for
houses
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 and growing the number of homeless individuals.
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 old
buildings
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 have in them cultural value, it is more crucial to provide a decent condition of living to those who need them,
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 why I do believe that building new
houses
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 would be more reasonable than restoring historical facilities. It is equally important to note that due to the development of new technologies there are changes in living conditions as well.
Houses
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 become more modernized and self-sufficient, which results in being more convenient in general, that's why more and more people by seeing all perks, chose
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buildings
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 as their home.
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, electricity, water and heating system in new
houses
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 are more efficient and reliable in comparison to those in ancient
buildings
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, where facilities are outdated and need repair all the time, which leads to additional exes. To illustrate
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 issue, we can compare prices for heating, usually, old apartments have high сeilings which makes them more attractive,
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, it makes them hard to warm which causes an increase in the cost of living there. To summarise there are definitely more advantages of spending money wisely by creating new
buildings
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, as it can provide up-to-date accommodation as well as decreasing the housing crisis we are facing nowadays.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical significance
  • Architectural style
  • Craftsmanship
  • Sustainable
  • Minimize
  • Energy efficiency
  • Housing shortages
  • Affordable options
  • Stimulate local economies
  • Tourism
  • Restoration industries
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