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some feel that cities should be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#feel #cities #functionality
Needless to say,
cities
 have better infrastructure and more job opportunities.Some
people
 think that
cities
 should be decorated to be beautiful while other
people
 argue that infrastructure is paramount in form of education, health and many more. From my
perspective
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 the latter statement appears to be more rational. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on the beneficial and adverse aspects of
this
 trend and
thus
 lead to a logical conclusion. There is adequate evidence to obtainable the
substantiate
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 reasons. The top-notch concrete reason is a tourist is the backbone of the country's economy. Architects should construct the building more attractive,
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as it's
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it's
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 enhance
beauty
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 of
cities
.
For instance
, Dubai is the top-tourism place in the world due to
high
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its high
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 attractive skyscrapers
buildings
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 which
encourages
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people
visits
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 those places again and again. What is known as half full for
other
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 may appear
empty
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 half for some
.
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 So
people
in general
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tends
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 to distinguish that
cities's
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functional
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 is more important. Basically,
city
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 is the centralized place where most
of
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apply
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the
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people
 come here for job
opporunities
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opportunities
 and settle here. Health and Education sectors are the essential part
to
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survice
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survival
 in the world. Without proper
funtionality
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functionality
, it's difficult to run the
industralization
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industrialization
 companies which indirectly affects the country's economy.
Hence
 it's apparent why many
of
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the
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people
 are in favour of
this
tread
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. To conclude, choose wisely based
upon
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 the place and requirements. To cite an example, developed countries should
contributed
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on
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to
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 architecture in
cities
 because all basic
functionalites
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functionalities
functionality
 are already
avaliable
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available
.
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