Being a celebrity –such as a famous film star or sports personality- brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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The life of famous people,

such

as actors and the sportsman,has both Benefits as well as issues.I believe that the advantages overweight the disadvantages.As they enjoy more perks than the common people and they

also

earn enormous amounts of money. On the one hand,celebrities live like a VIP wherever they go.

This

superior status makes their lives hassle-free.I

also

believe that well-known celebrities and sports personalities get special preferences wherever they go.

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, travelling,living,and dining.

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they are

also

given the status of a state guest wherever they visit,

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they

also

get financial benefits and relaxation from authorities,

For Instance

, footballer Heung-min-son's mandatory 2-year military service was reduced to just three weeks, because he won a gold medal for his country, So most of the famous folk enjoy special protocols in their tenure.

On the other hand

, famous individuals

also

have to face many problems,

Firstly

they can't move around freely as they constantly have to worry about their image

additionally

there is a lack of privacy as they are regularly under the scanner of media so their life is consistently scrutinised.

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they

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have to worry about the fact that they stay away from

greedy

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society, as they earn a lot of money

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obviously will attract

greedy

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a greedy

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and dangerous crowd.

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they are always surrounded by a crowd so they have to worry about their safety,

For example

, popular movie stars like Salman khan had to hire bodyguards due to regularly receiving death threats.

Thus

their life is too complicated. To conclude, I believe that the comforts associated with unique individuals are more and these are because of the love and care given to them by the masses.

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