Being a celebrity –such as a famous film star or sports personality- brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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The life of famous people,

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as actors and the sportsman,has both Benefits as well as issues.I believe that the advantages overweight the disadvantages.As they enjoy more perks than the common people and they

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earn enormous amounts of money. On the one hand,celebrities live like a VIP wherever they go.

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superior status makes their lives hassle-free.I

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believe that well-known celebrities and sports personalities get special preferences wherever they go.

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they are

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given the status of a state guest wherever they visit,

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they

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get financial benefits and relaxation from authorities,

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, footballer Heung-min-son's mandatory 2-year military service was reduced to just three weeks, because he won a gold medal for his country, So most of the famous folk enjoy special protocols in their tenure.

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, famous individuals

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have to face many problems,

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they can't move around freely as they constantly have to worry about their image

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there is a lack of privacy as they are regularly under the scanner of media so their life is consistently scrutinised.

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have to worry about the fact that they stay away from

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society, as they earn a lot of money

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obviously will attract

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and dangerous crowd.

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they are always surrounded by a crowd so they have to worry about their safety,

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, popular movie stars like Salman khan had to hire bodyguards due to regularly receiving death threats.

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their life is too complicated. To conclude, I believe that the comforts associated with unique individuals are more and these are because of the love and care given to them by the masses.

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