Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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their youngsters on how to be a good citizen while others think it can be taught in school.
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school that would develop their intellectual ability
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good values
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more important later in life. In schools, dedicated teachers would assist students improved in their subjects to
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excellence.
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they would receive from being a multi-awarded student without a positive attitude
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raised their children and taught them what is right from wrong.
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, youngsters listen and mimic them so it’s important to show the correct one.
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, if there is goodness in their heart, we will have a healthy community. In my opinion,
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age because they are the successor of our future generation. In conclusion, school is an integral part of a child’s development but it is the primary responsibility of the
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them. In my point of view,
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teacher and play a vital role in developing
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our society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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