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Some museum charge for admission while others are free Do you think the advantage of charging people to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

#museum #charge #admission #advantage #people #museums
Nowadays, it is more unlikely that people
visits
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museums
,
however
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 there are many
museums
 which are famous and visited by people. In order to have proper maintenance of these
museums
 entry fees
is
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are
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 levied on the visitors. In
this
 essay, we will weigh
pros
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the pros
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 and cons of the charging admission
fee
 for
museum
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a museum
the museum
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visit
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visits
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.
Museums
 by
it's
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its
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defination
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definition
 itself
indicates
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collection
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a collection
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 of old historic items and artefacts which might require delicate handling and care to preserve
it's
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its
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longetivity
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longevity
connectivity
. In order to do so,
sufficient
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 cost is involved. It is good practice to levy entry
fee
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fees
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 on
such
museums
 Some of the
museums
 which might be owned by
government
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the government
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 may not charge entry
fee
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fees
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 since the expenses to run the
museums
 would be bored by
government
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the government
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.
Additionally
 , if
museum
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the museum
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 charges
fee
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a fee
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, it would enable
to
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it's
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its
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 owners to procure more historic and rare
exhibit
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exhibits
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 and add to the collection which might attract more audience and boost the popularity of the museum .
However
,
it
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there is
downside
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a downside
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 to
this
 as well - many times
museums
 charge
exhorbitant
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exorbitant
 fees to their customers which eventually restricts people
visiting
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from visiting
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 thinking it might not be worth
money
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the money
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.
Also
,
this
 would eventually lead to
closure
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the closure
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 or poor maintenance of the
museums
. To summarize , it is good practice to levy optimal fees to the visitor
inorder
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in order
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 to attract more folks and maintain the
museums
.
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