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Many people think that home cooked food is healthy. But many people still prefer to eating out why is it so? Provide specific reasons and example with your opinion.

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Health plays a quintessential part in our life. With the advancement of accessibility in
this
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 modern era, a huge proportion of humans tend to rely on restaurants for their meals.
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However
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 there are
people
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 who claim that homemade
food
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 is the best choice for maintaining
healthy
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a healthy
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 life. In my opinion, I side towards the healthy version because of the fact that healthy
food
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 paves the way to our good health in future.
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 essay delves on the reasons in forthcoming paragraphs. In
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 cutting-edge era,
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limitation
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limitations
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 of available time and busy work schedules,
people
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 prefer to have their meals ordered from external sources rather than
preparing
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prepared
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 at home.Take
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for
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 instance, even if they want to cook
food
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 at home they cannot, due to the
work load
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 and stress.To
further
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 illustrate they tend to depend on sources
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 as hotels where
,
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 the
food
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 is quickly accessible.
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 these days many
tend
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 eat outside rather than
preparing
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prepare
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 healthy dishes at home.
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, with the advent of quick
food
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 delivery services, mankind is
further
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 addicted to
the
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food
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 from outside. To exemplify, placing an order on swiggy , zomato, from their comfort zone, helps them in gaining
an
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easy access in
comparision
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comparison
 to going
an
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and
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 picking up
food
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 in traffic and helps them save time spent in
puchasing
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purchasing
 groceries and ultimately
forgeting
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forgetting
 the detriments it could cause on
ones
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 life as a whole. All in all, though
people
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acknowlegde
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acknowledge
 the benefits of eating
self cooked
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self-cooked
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food
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, due to increased availability and affordability they tend to eat from outside.
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however
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i
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am
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opined
of
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to
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 eating homecooked
food
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 to protect one's own and
families
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family's
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 health from the
affects
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effects
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 that unsupervised
food
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 can cause. I
also
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 believe that awareness should be spread among
people
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 about the hazards of
unhygenic
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unhygienic
food
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.
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