Some people think that detailed description of crime scenes in newspapers and on TV can have a bad influence on the public, so this kind of information should be restricted in the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent times, rising number of
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scenes around the global world.
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or knowing brief information about
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scenes which creating a bad influence and
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people
's mental health. Some
people
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to
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knowing about
crime
information is the best way to
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tackle
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the problem. From my perspective, strongly disagree with
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details in the upcoming paragraph. There is adequate evidence
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substantiated reasons. The top-notch reason is living in
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democracy
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country.
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to know about what's happening around the world. Media play a crucial key
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the
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information to
people
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about
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crime
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scene
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,
people
would be more conscious.
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quickly return from work,
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alone
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midnight. Needless to say, all these points stand in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graphic content
  • Desensitization
  • Sensationalism
  • Ethical reporting
  • Media watchdog
  • Copycat crimes
  • Public perception
  • Law enforcement
  • Freedom of press
  • Informed citizenry
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