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car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now "one big traffic jam". How true do you think this statement is? what measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

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When we consider about
last
 three decades,the ownership of private
vehicles
such
 as
carsa
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cars
 has increased so rapidly.
Therefore
 above scenario,a traffic jam is created in economic cities all over the world.That has become a huge problem for the governments.So,to overcome the above case,authorities should take action to discourage people from using their own
vehicles
.
Initially
,they can develop public
transport
 services.
Secondly
,taxes can be implemented for using roads and owning
vehicles
. I suppose, the main reason
to
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people use their own
vehicles
 is comfort.Most
of
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the
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third
-world countries do not consider about
comfort
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 of
the
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using public
transport
such
 as buses and trains.The community feels extreme stress while using common
transport
 services
therefore
 crowded environment and untidiness.
Hence
,both men and women who can
affordable
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 to
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 their own car tend to get one.
Furthermore
,time is the most precious thing for professionals. If there is
the
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 trustworthy timetable for public
transport
 services,
then
 I hope people use it without confusion.In short,Implement of well management system for public buses and trains can decrease car ownership.
On the other hand
,when government earn taxes from highways and main roads, users reduce private vehicle ownership.
Then
this
 income can use for public
transport
 development projects while minimizing traffic jams. In conclusion,I suggest,If authorities take quick action for
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,
then
 spreading traffic jams can stop in the near future.The main actions that I have shown here are developing a
transport
 system while implementing taxes for car owners.
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