In some societies the number of crime comitted by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishment. To what extend do you agree?

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the number of

crime

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comitted

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committed

by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishment, in my essay I'll discuss

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opinion

and express my own

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. It's true that the rates

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crimes

comitted

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committed

by minors are increasing,

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minors as adults, probably won't solve the problem. ending

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issue requires a deep search

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the causes leading to the surge in law violation acts committed by

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teenagers in order to understand it, and

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correct the situation.

First

of all, what are the root causes responsible for the rise of crimes perpetrated by children below the age of 18

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it could be poverty, domestic violence and growing up in unstable families, drugs,

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of the media, or it could be something else we are unaware of. we need to reform the surrounding environment where the children

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they grow up healthy and sane. The

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thing we need to put in mind is that

penalty

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system was built to correct the convict's

behavior

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in order to return to

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society as a good citizen,

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convicting a teenager as an adult and locking him behind the pars with other adults for extended periods means we are sending

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young man for an expedition to become a professional criminal.

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, to me, I believe we need to eradicate the root causes leading the young and the adults to violate the law,

consequently

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crime rates will drop drastically.