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Disciplining a child is the responsibility of parents. Do you agree or disagree?

The role of teaching the young ones of the correct behaviours and social etiquette has always been the focus of society, in order to generate a polite and respectable
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 generation. Some people think the responsibility falls solely on the
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 , while others do not think so. In my opinion,
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 and our society as a whole play an equally crucial role in behaving
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.
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 of all,
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 spend a great deal of time at home,especially at pre-
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 age, Due to the nature of kids to admire their
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, they tend to follow their parent's instructions.
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,
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 should give clear directions and set good examples for their offspring from
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, and be stern when they make mistakes, though it can be a challenging task.
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, if a child throws tantrum because he does not get what he wants and they are allowed to do so , the child will not respect boundaries,
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 try to get away by repeating the same wrongful behaviour.
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, we can not deny the fundamental role
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 play in shaping the right attitude in
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.
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, punishment and reward systems should be installed at
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 and
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 have to be fair and just when executing them. If a child misbehaves, he should receive punishment so others will not follow . As
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 spend more and more time at
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, it is inevitable that
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 becomes an increasingly important place to ensure students are learning the right behaviours. In conclusion, I think there should be a collaboration between
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 and
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 to discipline
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. They need to understand and support each other, as well as trust that both parties are trying their best to bring maximal benefits to the younger generation. Without
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, our society will face many difficulties in producing youths that are respectful , productive and kind to each other.

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