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Fewer and fewer people want to become teachers especially in secondary schools. Why this happening and what can be done to tackle this problem?

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It is irrefutable fact that nowadays more and more
people
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 are not interested to become educators
especially
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secondary
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in secondary
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 school. But it is not
good
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 thing for
education
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 of society. In
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essay
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 I will highlight principal causes and give solutions to resolve them . The
first
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 and major reason for
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 is that in the present day
teachers
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 have
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 income
of
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 their job. Educators are being paid much lesser especially in high schools as compared to other jobs.
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 if you work pharmacist in a private hospital and you can earn twice as much as a public
schools
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teachers
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.
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 phenomenon
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people
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 for pursuing a career in the educational
feild
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field
.
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Furthermore
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 another problem is that teenagers are very difficult to deal with and pupils in
secondry
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secondary
 schools tend to disobey
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teachers
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 orders . Despite we can take several measures to solve these issues.
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 solution is that the
government
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 can raise
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the wage
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wage
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wages
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of
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for
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educations
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education
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. If
government
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 increase
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teachers
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teachers'
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 salary,
people
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 are more likely to work as
teachers
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.
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Moreover
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government
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 can offer scholarships to students to
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 their studies as
teachers
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 .
As a result
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,
people
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 with financial problems can afford to pursue higher education and become successful
teachers
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 . By way of
conclusion
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 I once again reaffirm my position that
in
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this
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 time fewer
people
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 want to become educators in the world. And we can be solved
this
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 problem with proper
planing
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planning
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. The
government
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 plays a crucial role to encourage the public
to
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because
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ofbecause
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teachers
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.

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