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Should long term job-seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work to give something back to society?

#term #job-seekers #receipt #government #work #society
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It is a topic of discussion
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 decades that long-term job seekers should do some community work to get
government
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 benefits so that they do their part for society. We will discuss the reasons in the
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, it becomes an individual's responsibility to contribute in some or another way when they are getting perks from the
government
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.
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,
people
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 can help organizations who take care of special children.
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 the monetary help, they can help by providing them with education etc.
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, they can help by taking participation in teaching activities. It will be a good help to the needy ones and you will feel more responsibility towards
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society. Organizations can give those
people
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 a certificate of contributions which can be used while tax filing to show the voluntary work they have done in that year.
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, the governments should amend the policies. Many
people
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 are misusing the benefits they get back from the job they do.
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 should be more vigilant and make stricter laws on these things.
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, a survey conducted by a leading media company reports that employees make fake donation receipts.
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 they take advantage
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 the tax returns by showing that contribution.
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, many
people
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 show
wrong
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 food bills and claim the amount which is provided by the
government
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. To conclude that long-term job seekers in return
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government
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 benefits
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made to do voluntary work can help the community to become
better
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 place for living. In long term, it will help the governments economically.
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