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Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 decades there is a tendency amongst people,especially the new generation, to move into megapolises and there is an opinion that
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 is harmful to everyone's
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. Meanwhile, there is a belief that life in a city has its benefits.
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, from my own perspective, the negative effects outweigh ones positive. Urbanization in the new millennium has reached its peak. The highest percentage of the population nowadays live in towns.
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 results in abnormal levels of noise,air and light pollution, which induce the development of various illnesses,
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, chronic obstructive pulmonary disease, asthma,mental
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 problems, and neurological ones.All
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 effects require more funding for national healthcare and create a burden on taxpayers. There was a survey in Ukraine in 2005, which proved that those citizens who lived in rural areas were less exposed to chronic pulmonary disease and mental
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 conditions,compared to ones from cities.
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, new residential areas in cities are surrounded by parks, which absorb carbon dioxide from fossil fuels.
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, in some ,megapolises drivers pay for the usage of cars in
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, which encourages everybody to use bicycles, walk or use public transport. All these measures already diminished the harmful impacts on people's organisms,though in a number of cities they have not been implemented yet. All things considered, the city lifestyle has its drawbacks including a negative impact on everybody's
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there are positive points of living in a megapolis, in my opinion, there are a lot of drawbacks,
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, noise,light, and air pollution, which result in numerous lung ,neurological and mental diseases.
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