Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Last
decades there is a tendency amongst people,especially the new generation, to move into megapolises and there is an opinion that
this
is harmful to everyone's
health
. Meanwhile, there is a belief that life in a city has its benefits.
However
, from my own perspective, the negative effects outweigh ones positive. Urbanization in the new millennium has reached its peak. The highest percentage of the population nowadays live in towns.
This
results in abnormal levels of noise,air and light pollution, which induce the development of various illnesses,
for instance
, chronic obstructive pulmonary disease, asthma,mental
health
problems, and neurological ones.All
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effects require more funding for national healthcare and create a burden on taxpayers. There was a survey in Ukraine in 2005, which proved that those citizens who lived in rural areas were less exposed to chronic pulmonary disease and mental
health
conditions,compared to ones from cities.
On the other hand
, new residential areas in cities are surrounded by parks, which absorb carbon dioxide from fossil fuels.
Moreover
, in some ,megapolises drivers pay for the usage of cars in
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, which encourages everybody to use bicycles, walk or use public transport. All these measures already diminished the harmful impacts on people's organisms,though in a number of cities they have not been implemented yet. All things considered, the city lifestyle has its drawbacks including a negative impact on everybody's
health
.
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there are positive points of living in a megapolis, in my opinion, there are a lot of drawbacks,
for example
, noise,light, and air pollution, which result in numerous lung ,neurological and mental diseases.
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