Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that circumstances of individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding on the punishment

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Nowadays,

crime

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rates are increasing at an alarming rate. So, it is essential to punish culprits to maintain law and order in society. According to my point of view, before taking any verdict it is

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very important to consider the

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circumstances

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for different crimes. Judges

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just verify the

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circumstances

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people

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commited

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committed

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but they had different intentions

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it is

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to give

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murder but their intentions were totally different. One acted with the intention of killing another person while

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, if judges announce punishments without considering intention and

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lead

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the insecurity among

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. They will feel helpless. For

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instance

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he/she will be afraid to counterattack to save himself/herself because of the same fixed punishment.

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point of view. According to them, it is

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one of the reasons

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crime

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rate. Because all culprits have the right to save themself from punishment.

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because they knew that

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thing can help them to escape from

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. In conclusion, it is very necessary to give hard punishments to set an example in society to get rid

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crime

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, but as well as judiciary

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to consider the

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circumstances

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before taking any verdict.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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fixed punishments
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potential offenders
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judicial process
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Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

You are bothered by the amount of trash in your local park.Write a letter to the head of the city park department .In your letter: • Describe the problem with the trash • Explain why it is a problem • Say what you think the city should do.

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?