Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that circumstances of individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding on the punishment

Nowadays,
crime
rates are increasing at an alarming rate. So, it is essential to punish culprits to maintain law and order in society. According to my point of view, before taking any verdict it is
also
very important to consider the
circumtances
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circumstances
and motivation of
crime
.
Intially
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Initially
, punishments are already set in
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for different crimes. Judges
are
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just verify the
circumtances
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circumstances
and motivation of the offence. If the two
people
commited
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committed
commit
the same
crime
but they had different intentions
then
it is
injustice
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to give
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the
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same
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punishment.
For example
, two
people
charged
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for
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murder but their intentions were totally different. One acted with the intention of killing another person while
second
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person
commited
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committed
commits
commuted
the offence
accidently
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accidentally
in
self-defense
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.
Secondly
, if judges announce punishments without considering intention and
circumtances
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circumstances
then
this
lead
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the insecurity among
people
. They will feel helpless. For
intance
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instance
, if a thief is snatching something from any individual
then
he/she will be afraid to counterattack to save himself/herself because of the same fixed punishment.
On the other hand
, some
people
oppose
this
point of view. According to them, it is
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one of the reasons
of
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growing
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crime
rate. Because all culprits have the right to save themself from punishment.
This
is giving them a chance to create
circumtances
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circumstances
in their
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favour
,
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because they knew that
this
thing can help them to escape from
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. In conclusion, it is very necessary to give hard punishments to set an example in society to get rid
from
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crime
, but as well as judiciary
also
need
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to consider the
circumtances
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circumstances
and motivation of
crime
before taking any verdict.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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