Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that circumstances of individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding on the punishment

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Nowadays,

crime

rates are increasing at an alarming rate. So, it is essential to punish culprits to maintain law and order in society. According to my point of view, before taking any verdict it is

also

very important to consider the

circumtances

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circumstances

and motivation of

crime

Intially

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Initially

, punishments are already set in

law-books

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for different crimes. Judges

are

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just verify the

circumtances

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circumstances

and motivation of the offence. If the two

people

commited

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committed

commit

the same

crime

but they had different intentions

then

it is

injustice

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an injustice

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to give

them

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the

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same

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punishment.

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, two

people

charged

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for

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murder but their intentions were totally different. One acted with the intention of killing another person while

second

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person

commited

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committed

commits

commuted

the offence

accidently

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accidentally

self-defense

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Secondly

, if judges announce punishments without considering intention and

circumtances

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circumstances

then

this

lead

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the insecurity among

people

. They will feel helpless. For

intance

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instance

, if a thief is snatching something from any individual

then

he/she will be afraid to counterattack to save himself/herself because of the same fixed punishment.

On the other hand

, some

people

oppose

this

point of view. According to them, it is

the

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one of the reasons

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for

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growing

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the growing

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crime

rate. Because all culprits have the right to save themself from punishment.

This

is giving them a chance to create

circumtances

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circumstances

in their

favore

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favour

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because they knew that

this

thing can help them to escape from

courts

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. In conclusion, it is very necessary to give hard punishments to set an example in society to get rid

from

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crime

, but as well as judiciary

also

need

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needs

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to consider the

circumtances

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circumstances

and motivation of

crime

before taking any verdict.

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