Some people think that giving aid to poor countries has more negative impacts than positive ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought by some people that
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poor countries have much more drawbacks than positive sides. I totally disagree with
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decreasing poorness.
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with, the
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and the most reason why I agree with helping poor communities is that it improves health facilities. Thanks to
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development, people can solve their health problems.
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, according to some studies, governments which are given aid can easily find local solutions
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citizens
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issues. The
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reason
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my agreement is that it
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education
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opportunities.
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, weak countries that are given aid may build
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education
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buildings
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as universities and colleges.
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of
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development, the level of
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incease
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decrease
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, I believe that it is a more effective practical idea.
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, another reason why I agree with
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idea is that it prevents
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.
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, If poor people are taken money, they will spend it for sustaining life.
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, we know that
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aid organizations play a key role
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the
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Africa. Thanks to
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help they could their lives.
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, I think that it is a more reasonable way for solving
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problem. In conclusion, giving help
poor
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countries is a good idea and I agree with it because of developing health care systems, progressing
education
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, and preventing poorness. If
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solution is put into practice, it will have better consequences for society.
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