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The development of the period has increased the disparity in some countries. It causes numerous amount of crimes because of the complexity of the issue we face. In most cities, especially the big ones, disparity feels very significant. It is due to the gap between the social classes that increase higher. Some
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 are very rich and others are poor.
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, nowadays rich
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 are keen on to be YouTubers or influencers to show flexing content on social
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 about their prosperity even their extravagant life.
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, an expert ever criticizes that kind of lifestyle can encourage social revolution like what happened in France centuries ago between the bourgeois and the proletariat.
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, the development of technology and digital
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 has increased the engagement of
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 online. It has become the trend for the intense use of social
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. The vast majority like to scroll through the content of social
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 all the time, which makes them tend to consume toxicity a lot without realizing it.
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, middle-class and low-class
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 are triggered to imitate the rich
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's lifestyle, but they don't have any resources to be the same. The problem is
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 nowadays tend to follow the trend to connect more with society, and most of them really need recognition.
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, the criminal urges often come not only because they are poor and lack resources for education and food, but due to their urgency to be recognized by fulfilling their lifestyle. I think, to cope with
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 phenomenon we need to build awareness through self-reflection and social sensitivity. By evaluating our life, we will see the path of how to be more empathetic. I believe
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 is a social problem that should be solved together. Without awareness and collaboration,
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 issue can not be addressed well. In a nutshell, rich
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 who often do flexing content will encourage middle-class and low-class
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 to imitate their lifestyles. It creates a trend and social pressure for those
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 who lack resources to fulfil the urge for self-recognition through criminal activity.
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