An increasing number of people now are using the Internet to meet other and socialize .some think this has brought people closer together while other think people are becoming more isolated .Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, more
people
are using social
media
to get in
touch
with each other rather than meeting
them
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in person. Some
people
reckon that the use of social
media
has the advantage of bringing
people
closer to each other.
On the contrary
, other
people
think that they have made them
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.
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thoughts in
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and
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express the author's own opinion as well. Some
people
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the
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positive view of social
media
as it plays a crucial role in bringing them in contact with their peers. Social
media
is a blessing for some
people
who are too busy to get in
touch
with their
friends
and relatives. It provides them with the opportunity to get updates
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personal life events of their
friends
and relatives
such
as birthdays,
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in
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, etc.
Furthermore
, it saves us a lot of time, since we are getting in
touch
with each other virtually.
In other words
, it makes our life easy.
In contrast
, some
people
view social
media
as having
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impact of isolating
people
. They think that
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it is eliminating the need
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meeting
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the meeting
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people
with each other. These days
people
are too indolent to meet their peers in person
,
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since they are always in contact with each other through social
media
. Eventually,
this
is putting them in a corner and
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them from each other. In my opinion, social
media
is actually bringing
people
closer to each other.
However
, one should not depend on it solely to get in
touch
with each other. Social
media
has allowed many
people
to find their long
last
friends
. It would have been almost impossible to find
friends
whom
people
met in
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secondary
school days. Considering
this
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, it can be said that social
media
is actually helping
people
to get closer to each other.
Everthing
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Everything
has both advantages and disadvantages.
Likewise
,
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of social
media
has
also
both positive and negative impacts. Despite many
people
considering it as isolating
people
from each other, many others including myself view it as playing a crucial role to bring
people
closer to each other.
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