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An increasing number of people now are using the Internet to meet other and socialize .some think this has brought people closer together while other think people are becoming more isolated .Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, more
people
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 are using social
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 to get in
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 with each other rather than meeting
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in person. Some
people
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 reckon that the use of social
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 has the advantage of bringing
people
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 closer to each other.
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, other
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 think that they have made them
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.
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thoughts in
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 and
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express the author's own opinion as well. Some
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the
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 positive view of social
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 as it plays a crucial role in bringing them in contact with their peers. Social
media
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 is a blessing for some
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 who are too busy to get in
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 with their
friends
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 and relatives. It provides them with the opportunity to get updates
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 personal life events of their
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 and relatives
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 as birthdays,
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 in
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jobs
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, etc.
Furthermore
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, it saves us a lot of time, since we are getting in
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 with each other virtually.
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, it makes our life easy.
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, some
people
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 view social
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 as having
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 impact of isolating
people
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. They think that
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 it is eliminating the need
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meeting
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the meeting
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people
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 with each other. These days
people
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 are too indolent to meet their peers in person
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 since they are always in contact with each other through social
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. Eventually,
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 is putting them in a corner and
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 them from each other. In my opinion, social
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 is actually bringing
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 closer to each other.
However
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, one should not depend on it solely to get in
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 with each other. Social
media
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 has allowed many
people
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 to find their long
last
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friends
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. It would have been almost impossible to find
friends
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 whom
people
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 met in
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secondary
 school days. Considering
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, it can be said that social
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 is actually helping
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 to get closer to each other.
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 has both advantages and disadvantages.
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,
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 of social
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 has
also
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 both positive and negative impacts. Despite many
people
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 considering it as isolating
people
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 from each other, many others including myself view it as playing a crucial role to bring
people
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 closer to each other.
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