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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
It is urged by some people that
companies
 should have responsibilities for society as with making profits.
Although
 organizations need to get good finance, I believe that
companies
 should consider having a good moral obligation to society. On the one hand, it is clear that the main target of each company in the business area is making money.
In other words
, organizations can be run for a long time by getting inherently adequate incomes and it makes more local people get job opportunities.
For example
, if there is a big industry in some regions, the people in
this
 region do not need to migrate to other cities in order to get a job and they can able to get a job in their local factory.
Therefore
,
companies
 or factory must need to get higher profits to extend the
companies
 for reducing jobless rates and to pay extra incentives to employees.
However
, having a great obligation to society plays a vital role in the business area for getting both
companies
 ‘reputation and a better environment in our civilization. Most industries should consider how to protect the environment from getting the effects of production and industrial waste that come out from their factories.
For instance
, as for paper industries, most raw materials come from trees and
this
 can be harmful to the earth we
liveon
Correct your spelling
live on
.
Therefore
, authorities in factories take into consideration recycling or upcycling to protect the environment.
Moreover
, enterprises are able to keep a high profile and improve the reputation of organizations’ names or brands by setting up a charity and donating money to the public who are really in need
such
 as the homeless, orphans and nursing homes. To sum up,
nevertheless
 getting a significant amount of money in enterprises is paramount to running a business for a long time, it is
also
 important to have social accountabilities to achieve success in enterprises.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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