In Britain ,when someone gets pld,they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them.Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay? Give your reasons ?

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kingdom, it is very common that senior citizens
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homes,as the youngsters are busy with their work life,here we can discuss
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so that they have company to share
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required.
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younger family
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them,they prefer to live away from the family.
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it is not possible for their children when they are working. when growing older ,
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slow down, health issues may
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and expances
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expances
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expanses
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of medical needs are so high ,some families may not be capable of spend on it,during their
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time
they might have paid
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insurance
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the tax to the
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government
andserved
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and served
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,so it is
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government
responsible to pay and taking
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of senior citizens in the country and
also
hairing the nurses for
further
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homes.
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if a person worked he would
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for provident fund and
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insurance
as well it will be help full in his later age and after
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retirement
of his career . In
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seniour
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senior
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home
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on
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families and like to live peacefully with their peers,and
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the
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government
as paid taxes in their
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