some think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay based on how much they produce and sell To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

In
this
contemporary world, companies try different ways to keep their employees more productive and focus on work. Some prefer higher wages or insensitivity. Which undoubtedly shows remarkable results. But I partially agree with it because what I believe is, behaviour with employees
also
plays a vital role to keep encouraging them. Thank you from the bottom of my heart for
tolerate
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me
taught
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me
tones
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tonnes
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of new things, support me in
toughest
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the toughest
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time
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unconditionally. Sorry for all the difficulties and
problem
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your
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were facing because of me. It could not possible for me to come out
from
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the
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difficult situations without your help. I really wish
this
upcoming year will give you all the heights in life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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