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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. why is this?Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#businesses #emphasise #products #development
In the current era,
technology
 played a huge role in
business
 development.Especially in marketing, we have a lot of easy ways to access customers due to
our
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 advent of
technology
. It will help to grow our businesses around the
world
.I agree with
that
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 positive development of
technology
 and let
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 discuss
about
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Firstly
,
past
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 decades we don't have
this
 much exposure in the
world
 but nowadays we have huge
developement
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development
 in our
technology
 and
its
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it's
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useful
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 to develop the
business
 in
good
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 way.most people wanted to reach their
products
 to all the people.Usually, we have followed our old style advertisements
such
 as newspapers,posters,
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and catalogs
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catalogs
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 these all are
traditional
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way
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 to
displays
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 our
products
 to the buyer but these all are not help to grow our
business
 wider .
for example
, in the village have one cake shop their want to explore their
products
 so they will print offer
catalogs
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 and give to customers.
Secondly
,
in
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the
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digital
technology
 have a lot of opportunities to advertise
the
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apply
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products
 to the
world
.It will help to reach all the customers around the globe.Current trends
such
 as Facebook,
instagram
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Instagram
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 and
twitter
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 are the best advertising application for those who
are sell
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 their
products
 online .
in
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the
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online applications help to grow their
business
 without
huge
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 investment.
For instance
, one young poor girl started
saree
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business
 through
instagram
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Instagram
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 and she did more reels and display her
products
 .later she received orders around the
world
 . Advent
technology
help
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 to develop
business
 and easy to access people everywhere .
However
, more
fradulent
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fraudulent
 activities
also
happend
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happened
happen
 in online
business
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businesses
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such
 as money
scam
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scams
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 and fake
products
. To all put
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it in
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in to
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the
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a
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 nutshell, all
business
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businesses
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 need to advertise their
products
 to consumers
otherwise
 most of them don't know about the
products
.Current
technology
 played
major
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a major
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 role to reach
the
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apply
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products
 to everyone .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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