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Do you agree or disagree with the following statements ? with the help of technology , students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly.

#statements #help #technology #students #information
In today's modern world,
technology
 found
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 way
within
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 many fields
such
 as
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 workspace, educational settings and entertainment. Education and academic fields are one of the main fields that benefited from
the
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technology
 and
it's
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 tools, I highly agree that
students
 nowadays are more
knowledgable
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 and able to learn faster with the help of
technology
, because of higher access and reachability to data,
also
 having access to lots of different mediums of media that can suit their learning styles and help them learn different types of information faster.
To begin
 with,
technology
 has led to discoveries
such
 as
internet
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, computers, smartphones and tablets that
every each
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one
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of them made accessing to the
informations
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information
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 and storing them easier for
students
.
for
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students
 by using websites
such
 as google, youtube,
linkedin
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LinkedIn
Linkedin
 and ... can find any
informations
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 they need in
matter
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 of seconds while generations ago it was a very
time consuming
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 task to find
informations
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information
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 you need if not impossible.
Also
, with the help of laptops and smartphones
students
 are more able to write down the
informations
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information
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 they've learned and store them.
Also
 with the help of many different
softwares
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software
 that exist within different forms of
technology
students
 are now able to find a variety of applications designed specifically for faster and easier education, and through
this
medium
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 they are able to learn a lot faster than
students
 from decades ago.
for
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 an application like
duolingo
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 help not only
students
 but most
of
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the
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people, to learn many different languages with utmost
easability
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usability
erasability
feasibility
. in
conclution
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conclusion
, for
reasons
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 mentioned above, I believe with certainty that
technology
 as a new discovery of mankind
,
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 helps
students
 at every level to become more
knowledgable
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 and more
compotent
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competent
 within their field. knowing and learning the usability of different types of
technology
 nowadays is a
necessitation
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 that most
students
 must have the qualifications for.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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