Some people think reading stories in books is better than watching TV or playing computer games for childre. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is controversial whether children should read books, play computer games, or watch TV. In my opinion, I think
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book is better than the others, in physical and mental ways. There are several reasons why I think reading is a more efficient and healthier hobby for kids.
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, books can improve and encourage imagination, which is critical for development. Children can create a relative picture or a dynamic world,
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, in their minds. Computers or TVs could not provide
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function. They gave the images and the results right away before the kids started to think about it.
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, stories provide a clear storyline that can show people how to describe a story or a thing.
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ability is essential. It requires logical thinking and clear expression, both vital qualities in one's future development.
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can provide a world outside of real life, which can lighter
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and stress, a place child can fulfil their spiritual space and build
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shelter. In the long term, these can make them stronger people.
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, there is a voice arise some problems with reading, that people can be introverted and live in their world
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of a real one. Some say it is challenging to interact with
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, it is partly true. And there are
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some advantages to watching TV or playing pc plays,
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, the ability to identify different colours or practice dynamic eyesight.
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, both of them have some drawbacks and benefits. In general, it is better for youths to read more books. Still, they could do some other activities during the additional time. In conclusion, I agree that reading stories in
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is better for the juvenile.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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