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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#education #healthcare #government
Many
people
 believe that the
government
 should take the
responsibilty
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responsibility
 to educate and treat all of their citizens for free.
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 totally agree with
this
 statement. in
this
essay
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i
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 will discuss the reasons for my opinion.
First
 of all, healthcare is considered
as
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apply
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an essential service and should
provided
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provide
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 to
eveyone
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everyone
, especially poor
people
. As in every
community
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,community
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 there
is
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are
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 always
people
 who have money and be able to arrange a visit to see their physician and can afford to buy their prescription medications.
On the other hand
, there are many
can
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who can
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 not pay for a
doctor
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 visit. From a human perspective, there should be no discrimination according to
people
's wealth. For
this
 reason,
government
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 have to make it easier for poor citizens to access the healthcare system and get the
desirved
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desired
deserved
 treatment.
Secondly
, education is a cornerstone in the process of developing a country. While it might be
extravagant
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methode
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method
methods
 of building the best
community
 but the
on
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 the long run it will benefit the country
from
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 many aspects.
Moreover
,
a
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in a
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place where their dwellers
recieved
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receive
 the right education
they
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apply
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can be more productive and take care of their system.
For instance
, those who
born
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were born
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 in poverty and got the chance to
enroll
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enrol
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 in
the
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government funded
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eduction
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education
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 programmes,
they
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will be grateful to that
community
 and will work hard to
payback
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pay back
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 to it in the future. In opposite to
this
, a
community
 with less educated citizens can be an
epicenter
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 of problems where crime rates are high. In a
nut shell
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nutshell
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,
i
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 see that it is the role of the
government
 to pay for the
tution
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tuition
 and well-being of their
people
.
this
 will build a safer
community
 where residents can take care of
themeselves
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themselves
 and
looking
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 forward to
help
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 each other and do not feel different in terms of education and
healtcare
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healthcare
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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