All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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people

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believe that the

government

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should take the

responsibilty

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responsibility

to educate and treat all of their citizens for free.

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totally agree with

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will discuss the reasons for my opinion.

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of all, healthcare is considered

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an essential service and should

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everyone

, especially poor

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always

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who have money and be able to arrange a visit to see their physician and can afford to buy their prescription medications.

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not pay for a

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visit. From a human perspective, there should be no discrimination according to

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's wealth. For

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government

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have to make it easier for poor citizens to access the healthcare system and get the

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treatment.

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, education is a cornerstone in the process of developing a country. While it might be

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of building the best

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the long run it will benefit the country

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many aspects.

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place where their dwellers

recieved

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receive

the right education

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can be more productive and take care of their system.

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in poverty and got the chance to

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the

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government funded

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programmes,

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will be grateful to that

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and will work hard to

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to it in the future. In opposite to

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with less educated citizens can be an

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of problems where crime rates are high. In a

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see that it is the role of the

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to pay for the

tution

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tuition

and well-being of their

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will build a safer

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where residents can take care of

themeselves

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forward to

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each other and do not feel different in terms of education and

healtcare

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healthcare

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

305 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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