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Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museum are not needed anymore.To what extent do you agree?

#information #culture #history #internet #museum
It is commonly accepted that comprehensive details of
culture
 and
history
 are available in
ciber
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cyber
 space to the extent that the existence of
museums
are
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 nullified. I strongly disagree with
this
 opinion due to
following
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 reasons.
Firstly
,
museums
 allow spectators to
experience
history
 and
culture
 by walking through them.
Secon
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 of all, it opens opportunities for
further
 research by allowing studies on actual specimens.
Therefore
, virtual
information
 on
history
 and
culture
in
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on
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 the internet could not replace the function of a museum.
Museums
 store vast
ammiunt
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amount
amounts
 of
information
 on
history
 and
culture
 in the way of
artifacts
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artefacts
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, fossils, and dummies.
Public
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The public
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 can visit a museum and look at the display items in
real time
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 and
experience
 them. For
an
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example, in some
museums
, visitors can wear replicas of ancient clothing items and taste similar cuisines at the premises to make the
experience
 more alive.
Furthermore
, scholars who are interested in
further
 studying a specific specimen can request
for
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such
endeavors
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endeavours
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.
For example
, fossils are being continuously studied with carbon dating methods to calculate their age. Not only that but
also
such
 studies continue to discover new
information
 about their geographical location, food pattern and other related species ext. In
summery
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summary
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,
museums
 provide
real-time
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a real-time
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experience
 of
history
 and
culture
, and open opportunities for more studies
oppose
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as oppose
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 to virtual facts available online via
internet
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the internet
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. Simply,
museums
 keep
history
 and
culture
 alive by allowing the audience to have actual
experience
in
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with
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 specimens.
Hence
, I strongly believe
museums
 are irreplaceable as
advantages
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the advantages
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 of
museums
 outweigh the vast amount of
information
 available
in
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 the internet regarding
history
 and
culture
.
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