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THE NUMBER OF PEOPLE WHO ARE AT RISK OF SERIOUS HEALTH PROBLEMS DUE TO BEING OVERWEIGHT IS INCREASING. WHAT IS THE REASON FOR GROWTH IN OVER WEIGHT PEOPLE IN SOCIETY . HOW CAN THIS PROBLEM BE SOLVED .

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In today's modern age,
obesity
 has become one of the most dangerous threats in society. many
people
 are suffering from heart attacks, overweight, and respiratory symptoms due to being overweight. In
this
essay
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 we will discuss the main reasons
of
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higher
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 incidents of overweight in society and several steps that can be taken to minimize
it's
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incident
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.
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 with,
Obesity
 is a result of today's modern age lifestyle. Our sedentary lifestyle and more working-hour jobs paved the way for
people
 to rush toward consuming more fast
foods
. Fast
foods
 are high in calories and they're mostly made out of unhealthy products. The
second
 thing to mention is
people
's lack of time for cooking, since they're busy working during the week, they have less time
making
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 healthy indoor
foods
. There are several ways in which
obesity
 can be addressed within society. A simple way is through small organizations
such
 as
NGO's
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 to increase
people
's knowledge on
this
 matter by presenting seminars and advertising the hazardous effects of
obesity
. The
second
 that can be done is by raising
tax
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 on fast food companies to increase the prices of fast
foods
. To sum up,
obesity
 has
became
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 one of the most dominant issues in recent years, and is mostly related to the way
of
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lifestyles
has
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 been created. there are several ways
such
 as increasing
people
's knowledge and raising taxes that
this
 issue can be addressed.
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