Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why this is the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, young people are mostly concentrated

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their smartphones

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their daily activities.

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my view, despite the advantages of the new technologies that arise from mobile phones, there are many downside effects on

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children

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growth. In

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essay, I will argue the reasons

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spending much more time on electronic devices and

then

explain a number of adverse impacts on

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children’s education. The daily use of

telephone

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by younger people

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whatever they are doing has many reasons. One of them is the high competition of

smartphones

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makers providing products with advanced technologies at a speedy frequency.

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,

phones

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devices become accessible for all kids at

a very low prices

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.

Besides

, the capability of their apparatus has drastically increased over the years,

this

fact led to

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great attractiveness of the mobile phone.

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when I was a high school student, the only thing that I could do with my

phones

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was

making

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phone

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a phone

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call

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or

writing

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messages.

Nevertheless

, today

there

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many

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games and enjoyable activities that can be done The

highly

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frequency implication of smartphones in

everydays

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everyday

activities has a number of drawbacks.

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of spending more time with their family to ensure

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social cohesion, young student focus on their device,

this

might lead to

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environment and kids are likely to be selfish. In my community, people gathered

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the dining rooms after a working day to discuss with their relatives and gain more education from them but currently, the fact that family meeting is replaced by technology make

family

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less cohesive. In conclusion, the frequent use of

smartphone

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smartphones

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is a double-edged sword with certain benefits as well as many

inconveniencies

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inconveniences

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. Even though new technologies should be involved

on

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the

kids

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educational background, their

usages

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should be controlled by the parents in order ta profit to a maximum profit.