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People living in the 21st century generally have a better quality of life than people who lived in the previous century. To what extent you agree or disagree.

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Science and technology have progressed by leaps and bounds in
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 21st century and enormous changes have been noticed in each sector of
life
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 whether it is the lifestyle of
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 or the health sector. I strongly agree with
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, consider the communication perspective. Now communication has become more easier and convenient than past.
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, earlier each person had to rely on mail, telegrams and many more carriers to get to know about their near and dear ones, but now with the advent of mobile phones and the internet,everyone can come to know about what is going on in their surroundings.
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, the whole world has become a global village and we can connect with anyone from any corner of the world within a seconds.
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, employment opportunities have grown through communication and
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 have been working within different countries and getting
a better salaries
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. Ultimately, their
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 is improving.
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, the automobile industry has brought a sea change in the travelling area. Masses of society can find jobs with the help of the internet and travel from one location to another by cars, Aeroplan and whatnot. In
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 way, they can cover thousands of miles within hours and earlier they used to take many more days.
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, healthcare Regan has become more sophisticated because ailments can be easily diagnosed with the help of advanced science and technology. To illustrate,during previous centuries,
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 easily died from a normal disease because the cure was not advanced and fast. Now
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 who have heart-related issues
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can easily increase their
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 span with the help of a pacemaker and survive many more years. Resultantly,
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 quality and lifestyle have improved . In conclusion,
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life
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 was good in the past time, mobile phones, the internet, and automobiles have shown a great change in
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 recent times and all
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 has become possible with advanced science and technology.
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