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The line graph gives information regarding the
sales
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 of
buns
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,
bread
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 and pies which are the most popular in a bakery for the year 2014. Overall, taking a closer look at the graph, it shows that
bread
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 had a higher number of
sales
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 during the beginning and end of the year. Both
buns
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 and
bread
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 had a fluctuating trend throughout.
Although
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 pies had the least number of customers, they increased steadily throughout the year.
Firstly
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, in January and December, 80,000$ worth
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bread
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of bread
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 was sold . Moving forward from February they had fluctuations till October which is
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 to the
sales
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 of
buns
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, but
sales
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 did not go below 40,000$.
Sales
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 started to rise up to Dec significantly.
Buns
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 started at 40,000$ in January, it raised steadily and reached a plateau of 70,000$ till august,
then
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 it started to decline, and in December the
sales
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 were 30,000 $ which was the least in comparison Turning to pies, which had exceptionally low
sales
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 till august ranging between 10,000$-20,000$.
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, it had substantial growth till December reaching 40,000$
sales
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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