Some people advocate the death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society.Describe the advantages and disadvantages of the death penalty and give your opinion.

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the
people
who killed the
person
. Others think that death punishment is very cruel for
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today's society.
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essay will explain
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and disadvantages of
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two issues.
Тoday's
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society became very
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because of stress and some drugs. Most of the crimes
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commetted
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committed
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people
who is
very
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bad childhood.
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the child who is humiliated
others
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in
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his
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young age by children or parents grows very tender and less
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humidity
humanity
.
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child
grow
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up
very
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high chance to commit
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violence
.
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this
punishment seemed very unfair to the
person
who is grown up
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this
situation.
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A prisoner
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can take a time to regret what
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do and can
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a
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good
person
as before.
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he
know
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that
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how freedom is very important and he can feel his life left behind. Some
people
born
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like
criminal
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criminals
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except
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any
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voilence
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violence
and other
situation
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situations
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.
of
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the
person
who is not any
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problem
killed
the
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person
who is very innocent is
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should have death
penalthy
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penalty
. Because
this
person
never
change
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and may commit
voilence
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violence
again in the future.
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the family of the victim shall complain about the defendant to punish him to the death
penalthy
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penalty
.
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may always suffer the family of the victim during their whole life. In my
view
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it's very
obvios
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obvious
to see what is the reason to murder and make
decision
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to
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about
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how to punish. There are many ways to
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killer
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a killer
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. Some
people
are born and some are acquired. But we must never kill each other
in
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any reason.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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