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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task。Write about the following topic：Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed，rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case？What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed？Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In recent years, an increasing number of individuals choose to
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work work
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 for themselves rather than to work for companies due to a plethora of reasons.
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, the major reason is work-life balance. In
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 trend before coming to a logical conclusion. There are myriad
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reasons to agree with the
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meritorious
 sides.
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First
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 and Foremost reason is working in
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 company,
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 to work more than eight hours
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the
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 day.
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, there are
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 rules and regulations and if
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employees
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 feel employee isn't worthy, they can be expelled from the company.
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, an individual who works for
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,
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can set their own rules and regulations.
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, they are
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 chance to earn more money and easily settle down in the early stage of
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life.Needless to say, all these points stand in good stead.
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, it is predicted that the thrones of the area cannot be neglected. The most worrying aspect is that
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 individual didn't meet the deadline of the targets, they may undergo financial losses.
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Entrepreneurship
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 to deal with many problems day by day which
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 to mental health
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.
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, it takes several years for the
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self-employed
 professional to establish themselves in their respective fields.
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, it's apparent
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why many
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the
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people are against
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 trend. In
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, I think
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 for oneself is definitely beneficial.
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, they should aware of
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the cons
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 and pros
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self-employment before venturing into one.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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