Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat for healthy diet. Agree / disagree?

It is commonly said that today's children are more vegetarian in comparison to previous years. Because they think that flesh is not necessary for their healthy diets. I disagree with
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statement. I personally believe that
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is certainly important for our
health
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. In recent years, teenagers more inclined to
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diet. Let us analyze why people do not want to eat
meat
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. The main reason is their detestation
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meat
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. Another reason is that wrong information.In their
mind
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it is not significant to eat
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for their diet. Yet,
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is so useful and full of
protien
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protein
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meat
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is profitable both for our
health
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and eyes. If
peope
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people
do not eat
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during ageing
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in spite of they are not old they cannot see tiny things. Even they might be blind. Not consuming
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can drastically affect a people's future life and
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, in my country, Usbekistan, for that matter. But
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, it is equally desired that parents and grandparents want their children to be strong,
healthy
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. As
peopel
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people
not eating
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, the chances of them suffering from serious illnesses increase.
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result
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the likelihood of them requiring medical treatment becomes higher, and it becomes more difficult to provide care for everyone. Medical care over the past century has improved dramatically.
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Furthermore
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everyone should take into consideration
to eat
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quality
meat
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, not only
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, but
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they should try to eat
the
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foods and
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that
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without
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chemical compounds. By way of my conclusion, I reiterate my opinion by saying that it is the most important thing for our
health
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is consuming
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everybody.

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